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A Precious Gift
By audrie
07 July 2007
This poem speaks for itself and nobody will ever convince me that I didn't see them and they have been fixed in my mind for many, many years, since I was five!
so - have a laugh!

A child sat in a garden alone
beside a rose bush, overgrown.
Warm in the heat of the glorious sun
feeling that she and Nature were one,
when out of the sunbeams six fairies flew
with wings of luminous, shimmering blue.

They danced and floated in a cloud of light.
The child was enrapt and gazed in delight
at the beautiful creatures held in her sight,
and a wonderful love of these beings so small
filled up her heart and held her in thrall.

She was too young to know what love was about
but she wanted to sing and she started to shout,
To her mother and sisters at what she had seen
of the beautiful fairies, and where they had been
and the glorious feeling that left her serene.

But her mother and sisters alas would not listen,
they laughed so much it made their eyes glisten.
The child turned away and shed bitter tears,
she knew she'd remember this moment for years
and the precious gift that she had been given
would be locked in her heart, forever hidden.

Until this moment when she has told you!
Now, are you going to laugh at her, too?

Reviews
Lovely
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 7th July 2007
What an absolutely beautiful story poem. I think children would really love this story.

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 8th July 2007
Not really my type of poem, but it seemed to flow pretty well and told the story effectively. It did strike me that she wasn't very serene as she was shouting at her mother and sisters. 
 
Phil
hi
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 8th July 2007
loved this Audrie. 
bernie
I thought
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 8th July 2007
you'd all scoff! So am delighted you haven't. 
 
Actually, after having a word with Josie, I have rewritten parts of it and feel it is better for it as the verses are now the same length. 
Is there any way to edit it on screen or do we have to rewrite? 
Be glad to know if you can help out. 
Thanks to all.

Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 9th July 2007
Thought this was lovely! It has a delicate quality about it - goes nicely with the image of fairies dancing in the sun. 
 

 

Written by sam_duke (19 comments posted) 15th July 2007
This is very touching. The way you tell the story would make it hard for anyone to even begin to doubt you. So I liked it!

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