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LOVERS FIGHTING
By JohnnyD
09 July 2007

LOVERS FIGHTING

 

Why? Why?

Say, say something at least!

How?

When?

Who???

What for?

You didn’t say a word!

It’s not possible!

Swear on God!

Can’t believe, really!

You?

What do I do now?

Tell me, only you can tell…

 
Johnny D

04th July 2007

 

Reviews

Written by Phil (6675 comments posted) 9th July 2007
I don't have the poetic language or knowledge to help you much more Johnny. For me, this is just a string of questions. If that constitutes poetry, fair enough, but it's not poetry I enjoy. 
 
For me it requires no thought or consideration in the reading. It doesn't challenge or inform. It has little or no rhythm or pulse. Perhaps it's just thast my taste deosn't suit your work. 
 
Phil
Sandburg...
Written by patterjack (1174 comments posted) 9th July 2007
...wore this form out many years ago, I think. 
 
His endings were usually much stronger 
 
patterjack
The first line says it all...
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 12th July 2007
Why? Why?

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