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Poetry
The Other
By maipenrai
10 July 2007
I will soon discard the other
the one you know as me,
he as served his purpose and
now he must be gone.

revealed
I shall heve my revenge on
intellectual timewasters,
they shall be burnt at the stake.

pontificating fools
shall be torn apart
by four horses wild,
their limbs to be eaten by the beasts

the unbelievers,
those who do not bow to
my enlightenment and inner peace
shall be boiled alive in a vat of pig fat.

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dear maipenrai
Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 10th July 2007
You seem to have an awful lot of rage inside you. It is good to get it out of your system, but have you tried punching pillows? It helps get rid of a hell of a lot of angst! 
 
dear maipenrai
Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 10th July 2007
You seem to have an awful lot of rage inside you. It is good to get it out of your system, but have you tried punching pillows? It helps get rid of a hell of a lot of angst! 
 
dear maipenrai
Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 10th July 2007
You seem to have an awful lot of rage inside you. It is good to get it out of your system, but have you tried punching pillows? It helps get rid of a hell of a lot of angst! 
 
I have
Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 10th July 2007
no idea why three comments of mine were posted, I only sent one!

Written by Phil (6393 comments posted) 10th July 2007
Contradiction in final verse worked well. Specific or generic? 
 
Phil.
Hi
Written by maipenrai (780 comments posted) 11th July 2007
to Audrie and Phil and thank you both for your comments. 
 
this is meant as a gentle p take on myself and others, sometimes as poets we let our sense of self importence overide our common sense and end up looking rather pretensious and foolish. 
 
Bernie
Charming...
Written by Talisker (1300 comments posted) 12th July 2007
A lovely piece of vicious invective, Bernie.  
 
Watch your spelling though... 
 
Oli
Thanks
Written by maipenrai (780 comments posted) 12th July 2007
Oli for your comments, your right about my spelling mate. 
Bernie

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