This was one I wrote for a National Cat Story, and got the vast sum of £20 for winning it!
I have changed the name, as it was first called: Uninvited Guest, but thought this title suits it better.
Which title do you prefer?
The first thing Sara noticed when she came out of doors were the prints in the snow. Her profound relief was tinged with concern. The trail led to the stone wall and into the copse beyond.
The animal must be very hungry to come so close to the cottage, but at least it was still alive. They called it 'The Beast of Bodmin'. A huge leopard, if the locals were to be believed! The animal was much larger than a domestic cat, it looked like a small panther. It had certainly frightened Sara when she had first come across it soon after she moved in.
It had been slumbering in the long undergrowth under the stone wall. A spitting, snarling bundle of energy had sprung up as Sara approached, intending to wage war on the massed weeds.
She had fallen back, too shocked to even cry out. Her garden fork had saved her from a mauling, as the frightened beast lashed out at her. White claws were vivid against the jet-black fur. Gold eyes blazed furiously before it turned, bounded over the low wall and disappeared into the dense thicket of trees.
The isolated cottage had been empty for some time. No doubt the animal thought itself safe. Intrigued now, rather than scared, Sara sliced off some meat from her joint that evening and placed it on top of the wall. She then retreated to her bedroom to watch events.
It had been a night of full moon and the offering was clearly visible. Sara waited for more than an hour before a sleek black shape detached itself from the shadows.
Front paws on the wall, it had sniffed the meat and gazed warily around.
After a moment, the beautiful creature lifted its head and looked up at the open window. Sara felt enchantment fill the space and a deep communication flow between herself and the wild beast. For a long moment gold eyes locked onto blue. Then the cat picked up the meat and sauntered off into the night, leaving Sara with a feeling of high exhilaration.
After a week of the same ritual, Sara tried putting the meat nearer to the cottage, on the lawn. But the cat was far too intelligent for that! It had appeared, but refused to come any nearer than the wall. A low humming wail issued from its throat, as if chiding Sara for her familiarity. It retreated into the trees, leaving the meat intact.
Sara had respected the animal's reticence and left the food on the wall. Every time the wild beast appeared, there was that long moment of communication with Sara.
She had been extremely concerned during the past few weeks when the cat had failed to show up. But, here were the pug marks in the snow and suddenly all was right
with Sara's world.
*
Her friends had thought her mad to exchange her modern London apartment for this old stone cottage on the edge of Bodmin Moor. But Sara gazed about her and heaved a sigh of pleasure.
The unfolding hills, usually a mosaic of earthy tones , were mantled in white. Not just plain white. Sara's artistic eye sought out the muted shades of powder blue shadow and pale gold light where the low winter sun tipped the brow of the hill. She breathed deeply in the cold crisp air, knowing she had made the right choice. Even an overnight layer of snow on Christmas Eve.
Perfect!
She sighed happily, more content now than she had been since Malcolm's death. Her paintings had taken on a lyrical quality and had sold well since she had been living here. Even spending Christmas alone was something she had insisted upon in order to celebrate its true meaning.
Sara wondered where her 'pet' had been for the past few weeks and decided she would give it a double helping of turkey tomorrow.
When she got back from the village shop , her cheeks were glowing with the biting air and she felt a lightness of heart, that was in no small measure due to the return of the cat. She had treasured the moments of silent rapport between them. A communication that sprang from her own deep love of Nature.
Sara went up the path but stopped short as a warning growl came from the porch. The cat lay on the red tiles, panting. An ugly round hole on its side was matted with congealed blood. The once sleek fur was dull and staring.
The once beautiful cat was thin to the point of starvation, its shallow breathing ragged and painful to hear. Gold eyes stared into blue.
'Oh, let me help you,' Sara cried out involuntarily, horrified at the animal's condition.
The wild cat gazed into Sara's eyes and transmitted a message loud and clear. At that moment a black cub, appeared between its mother's paws. At the sight of Sara, its back arched and it spat and snarled, as wild as its mother had been.
Sara dropped to her knees, oblivious of the snow soaking into her clothes. The message had been transmitted and understood.
'I'll look after him for you,' she whispered, into the golden eyes.
The long moment of communication was over. There was a faint rattle in the throat and the beautiful eyes glazed over. What had been a living creature, lithe and free, was nothing but a shell.
'God speed!' Sara cried, feeling a savage rage for the human being who had fired the gun.
The cub looked perplexed and butted its head against the dead cat. It's little tongue came out as it tried to lick some life into it's mother's inert form.
Sara slid past the cub and into her kitchen. She had some giblets, lightly boiled, on the stove. She found a plate and mashed some of the liver and heart and took it outside. After a few seconds of hissing, the aroma of the giblets was too appealing and the cub ate ravenously.
It seemed she would be having a guest for Christmas, after all!
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I am so sorry Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 11th July 2007 | I have put this short story in the poetry section again. I do click on short story but forgot to click on the other tab. I will try to do what Phil has suggested to get rid of it to the SSS! | Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 12th July 2007 | Well doen with the competition win. Simple story, well told. I think there's a little of the Beast of Bodmin in all cats. I know ours thinks he's a bloody great panther. Phil. | Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 13th July 2007 | Nice...very nice infact. Loved some of the imagery. A simple tale told full of compassion. It seemed to me as if the cat built this relationshjip with Sara knowing that something awful was to happen to her and in the time of need she can count on her to help. And yes congaratulations on winning the competition. Umm, about the title, I think this one suits better. Regards, TT | Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 13th July 2007 | A superb little tale and I'm not surprised it won. You packed such a lot into this short story without if feeling forced or losing the main narrative; the womans backstory and character. It all built well to a moving climax and managing to avoid sentimentality. A well structured and very focussed taleI'm sure it would go down a storm with cat lovers everywhere [and sadly I've just lost mine] cheers Jane | P.S Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 13th July 2007 | | I'm not too keen on either title ; as she wasn't really a beast as such, and she wasn't an in truth and uninvited guest. Myabe something hinting at the passing on of stewardship. It is significant the cat picked a woman for her young. | Many thanks Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 13th July 2007 | to all of you. In answer to Jane, the 'Beast of Bodmin' was what the locals called it. Believe it or not, there actually was a story in the local paper and on the news, that a black panther had been seen, not half a mile away, with photographs, and a lamb that had been killed with large-cat type claw marks on its carcass, definitely not a dog. I only wish I could say that the story was true but all the talk was of going out with guns to get the beast. I hated that thought and wondered what I would do if I came across it! And the uninvited guest was the cub, not the cat. | Jane Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 13th July 2007 | | you have my sympathy for the loss of your cat. They break your heart, don't they, when you have to part with them. I've always been a cat person. | Written by Asferthecat (834 comments posted) 14th July 2007 | I take it that it actually was a panther, rather than just a feral cat. Nice story. Well done with your win. | ASFTC Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 14th July 2007 | Oh yes, it was definitely bigger than a feral cat. The pug marks were bigger too. There have been several sightings of panther-type cats seen in various places in England. Some of them apocryphal of course, but some vets have been convinced that the claw marks on the carcasses were 'much larger than a domestic or feral cat could have made.' It has been assumed that when new laws came in about keeping wild animals, rather than pay the extras that would be needed, the owners just turned them loose in the countryside. What a rotten lot! | Congrats, and well done! Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 14th July 2007 | Though I admit to being insanely jealous at the thought that you've WON a competitive event and I 'm still waiting!!!! You're speaking to a Number One Cat Person (hence my nom de plume!!) and I love the way you tell the tale. My in-laws live in Sweden, and once shared their house [NOBODY "owns" a cat!!!!] with a Norwegian Forest Cat. He managed on one occasion to see off a scavenging WOLF which tried to root in the bins, but left behind a trail of blood and pawprints in the snow ........ Your tale reminded me of a short piece I posted in the "Non Fiction" boards some considerable time ago.... but yours has a more 'upbeat' ending... thank you once again (I'll always be a sucker for cat stories!!) | Thanks, Bagheera, Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 15th July 2007 | You are absolutely right, the cats allow us to live in their domain! I had a Siamese once who, when a huge Great Dane came lolloping down our path, she advanced on him with stiff legs and bottlebrush tail, and all her fur standing up, howling as only a Siamese can, and the poor dog turned tail and fled! He was at least five times her size!! I had her for 18 years, she was a real little friend. I miss her still. | Impressive!! Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 15th July 2007 | You had ONE Siamese?? For EIGHTEEN years???!! And you BOTH remained sane!!!!!!!!!! I was under the impression that ONE Siamese is an impossibility! I am reliably informed that one HAS to have a PAIR, so they don't drive their human slave mad ..... | Contrast Written by flook123 (35 comments posted) 16th July 2007 | I too enjoyed this, though just having read GerardConnolly's 'Animal Rights and Human Wrongs' I felt there was a story that emphatically would NOT win a prize from a Cat Society. Your approach is much more traditional and provides a perfect contrast. Two stories poles apart in their conception and style but both with so much to recommend to a reader. Well done. Like Phil, I feel. Simple story well told. Regards, Lance. | Written by Seagull (174 comments posted) 24th July 2007 | Congrats on your win. I liked the story - even though I'm not a cat person. I identified with the woman living alone on Bodmin Moor as I've done my fair share of that over the years. A good story, well told, and I took the title to be ironic! |
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