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My Best Friend, My Dog
By ToniBowling
14 July 2007

Jake is more than just a dog is part of our family.  I would be lost without him.


Even though he’s older than me,
And we’re different I just can’t see.
My life without him in it,
I want to be with him every minute.
Some days we will just spend time walking,
Often I am the only one talking.
Sometimes we will walk for a mile,
He knows just how to make me smile.
He doesn’t have to make a sound,
For my heart knows when he’s around.
I feel his gentle touch,
And I love him so much.
He’s the one, who chases away my fears,
He’s the one who silently sees my tears.
And even though his days are numbered,
I wrap my arms around his neck while I slumber.
In my dreams I see us running together,
Believing we’ll be together forever.
We’re having so much fun,
We don’t realize when the day is done.
We’re having such a fun time,
He’s forever in my mind.
And then he kisses me awake,
And it’s a gentle kiss from my best friend, my dog Jake.

Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3248 comments posted) 14th July 2007
A sweet poem. The rhyme is mostly OK, but it could have done with more structure. I liked the content :)

Written by ToniBowling (6 comments posted) 14th July 2007
Awesome! I greatly appreciate your response. There is a lot more in my book as well on my web-site at www.cravenspublishing.com.

Written by fellpony (1603 comments posted) 14th July 2007
"he’s older than me, 
And we’re different I just can’t see." 
 
Is your dog a seeing-eye guide dog then? 
 
Bland. 
 

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3331 comments posted) 15th July 2007
I guess you are either a dog person or you aren't and if you aren't then this will go over their heads. I can sympathise totally with your sentiments. I think you have conveyed that unique bonding really vividly. There were a few lines that didn't quite work but I could understand and empathise with the work on the whole. Enjoy him while you can; we only have them a short while, their loyalty in unquestioning and their love is unconditional 
cheers 
Jane

Written by ToniBowling (6 comments posted) 15th July 2007
Thank you all for your reviews and comments. I greatly appreciate you taking the time in reading this poem and replying on it.

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