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Poetry
Leisure
By uche
16 July 2007
some days life should be a slow moving stream

now underneath the green umbrella
of the mango tree i shall sit, idle poet,

watch the lazy fingers of dusk
sketch dainty petals of crocus in the sky;

listen to the melodies of leaves
crisp and golden like husks in harmattan;

twiddle the fine-haired blades
of lemon grass thick and buoyant;

sniff the sea-balmy scent
of the late breezes dancing frolicsome,

free my mind of the tedious thoughts
of tomorrow's sundry sorrows and cares!


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Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 16th July 2007
uche, I really like this. I can imagine you resting at ease and watching the world go by. 
I don't think any of us take 'the time to stand and stare' as perhaps we should.

Written by Phil (6688 comments posted) 16th July 2007
Enjoyed this Uche. Much more restful than usual - but still with threatening undertones. 
 
Particularly liked: 
 
watch the lazy fingers of dusk 
sketch dainty petals of crocus in the sky; 
 
Phil
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Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 17th July 2007
you going soft Uche :grin :grin  
 
a nice write mate. 
Bernie
resting
Written by uche (44 comments posted) 17th July 2007
thought i deserve some ease after the ravages eating up mu motherland, thanks pals.

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 17th July 2007
I like the images conjured up by this piece. Found a few words a bit out of place though, like "twiddle" and "frolicsome". Also found the exclamation mark at the end unnecessary. Other than that, a pleasure to read.

Written by Fledermaus (3248 comments posted) 17th July 2007
That sounds like a much more cheerful side of Nigeria than your other poems. Sad that the thirst for oil is destroying such a country rather than improving it. Especially in that light it's very nice how you describe those things which were probably always there, and which no money can buy...

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 17th July 2007
A very peaceful piece. Some lovely turns of phrase and imagery. A pleasure to read.

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