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"words couldn't do it..."

By no1butClo

18 July 2007

Yet ANOTHER attempt to do something with these two opening lines. It was only really thrown together, but I thought I'd give it an airing and see what you thought... drivel? I thought so too.

*Post review* - thought I'd just explain where the opening line came from; for some reason I have a vivid memory of my english teacher rubbing - 'warming' - the spine of an old book so as not to crack the glue when he opened it. I liked the idea.

Warm my spine, I may yet crack,
The pages falling at my back
Do nothing to absolve my fate,
I am a broken book, of late.

Such tomes should not be left on show,
When all the words inside them know
They've earnt their literary keep
But are not content to sit and sleep.

And so my words revolt, and spread
to other books that aren't unread,
and leave me, lonely, on a shelf
unwritten; I shall write myself.

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tricksy
Written by patterjack (1195 comments posted) 17th July 2007

Not drivel though.No need for self deprecation

I read this as not all that serious -- there is the *tang* of one or two of the elder poets of last century about it -- which , as an aged person myself , I enjoy.

An ironic , objective view of your own work -- refreshing and without the awful angst we are so often inflicted with.

Liked it a lot !

patterjack

hi
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 18th July 2007

I agree with patterjack.
Bernie

interesting
Written by uche (44 comments posted) 18th July 2007

this is inspirational
i may consider wriitng about a cracked vase

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 18th July 2007

Liked this Clo, particularly the last. A little like a poetic pick-me-up.

Phil

AND
Written by patterjack (1195 comments posted) 18th July 2007

the angst i referred to was not a quality that YOU show our clo !

it belongs to other lesseer lights !

patterjack

Written by Livinginanattic (456 comments posted) 21st July 2007

Definitely not drivel Clo. Enjoyed the tone of this.

Ben

Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 21st July 2007

Liked it...enjoyed this quiet a bit (would get a much better response in the poetry section)

Regards,
TT

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 25th July 2007

love this. Flows well and is an interesting idea, writing from the point of view of a book. Particularly enjoy the beginning and end lines. Well done.

Written by Hellcat (63 comments posted) 4th January 2008

I loved this.....well done. It's quite beautiful

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