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Human rights?
By Fledermaus
20 July 2007
Two years ago, eleven asylumseekers died, because they were locked up and a fire broke out in their prison. So far only one minister resigned and he is back in office already. The others just chose to look the other way...
And then our politicians dare to accuse other nations of violating human rights...

October 27
The year 2005
People were killed, eleven
In their panic, burned alive

What so-called human rights?
So you accuse the other
But when people burned that night
You MPs just didn't bother?

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Human rights
Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 20th July 2007
Yes Fledermaus, what you have drawn our attention to is awful beyond words, but they died because they were in a building engulfed in fire from which they could not escape, not because they were asylumseekers. We hear so much of young children who are burnt alive in houses when fires break out, and that is also dreadful. Anyone at all who cannot escape from a fire is to be dreadfully pitied. I don't know what the answer is to the problem of asylum seekers. The problem is that they come here before they have been officially admitted. I wanted to go to work in Canada, but had to wait and wait before I was allowed to go in the proper way. Many of them, though, are escaping from dreadful conditions in their homeland. What is your answer?

Written by Fledermaus (3484 comments posted) 20th July 2007
Thanks Josie, 
They couldn't escape because they were locked up and no-one opened the doors to their cells in time. I can understand the government want to limit imigration, but the way some asylumseekers are treated nowadays is inhumane.  
Most of these people aren't criminals, so why put them in prison? 
 
Of course the fire itself isn't the government's fault, but the fact that those people were locked up, and that no-one set them free in time is their responsibility. Yet it seems they don't suffer even the slightest consequence.
neat rhyme
Written by uche (44 comments posted) 21st July 2007
refer to line 4, stanza i 
spelling should read ALIVE 
good work

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 21st July 2007
Not knowing enough about the context/details of the event, it's hard to comment properly.  
 
Tragic: undoubtedly. The issue of asylum seekers is pretty emotive to many. Not sure this taps into those emotions strongly enough. 
 
The simple report and question work well - but would have had more impact with more context. 
 
Phil.

Written by Fledermaus (3484 comments posted) 23rd July 2007
Thanks Uche and Phil. 
Uche: Iīll correct it. Itīs one of those things I always seem to do wrong, mixing up f and v in English. I have no clue for instance what the plurals of words like leaf, wolf and elf are, and things like safe and save are hard to keep apart too. 
 
Phil: I was sddenly reminded about it, because a parliament comittee just published a report that clears eveyone of blame. A disgrace realy, for firstly, if no-one is to blame, how could those people have died? And secondly another comittee, led by the husband of princess Margriet, claimed that some people had been very wrong. Yet parliament apparantly wasnīt pleased with Mr. Van Vollenhovenīs conclusions, and decided to write their own report... 
 

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