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The relativity of cruelty

By BrianRobertNeal

22 July 2007

Main Verse.

His knife slashes the face and breasts,
Of a hapless young stewardess,
Whose crime was to wish a nice day?
Don’t try to excuse this away.

Coda

We’re told that “ends justify means”
If to barbarity means tends.
And their fundaments are obscene
Have the means not destroyed “the ends”?

Footnote.

However if barbarity
Is from you and suffered by me
It’s crime against humanity.

Vice versa on the other hand
Is something really rather grand
As you all surely understand.

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Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 22nd July 2007

I think I've seen at least some of this before Brian.
Interesting set up. I got a little tied up in exact meaning. For me, the second and third need looking at in terms of precise punctuation, verb form and a missing word. I'll not embarrass myself by putting what I thought it should be as it could be my stupidity!

Phil.

Watto Phil
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 22nd July 2007

The first verse has a new fourth line.

As for punctuation etc, I claim poetic license!
Rhyme and syllable count being King and Queen.

A clue to verse 2: Idealists who terrorise and destroy their opponents in the name of "humanity" or Godliness.

Verse 3 and 4:when you something to me, it's an outrage, but if I do it to you it's justified.

It has 14 lines, have I invented a new sonnet form, two quatrains and two triplets?

Thanks for your time and comments,

Brian

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