Just keeping the writing muscles exercised.
The bluebells were never so blue,
and the grass was never so green,
as the dusk of the dying dayglow
in the April that might have been.
The sky was never so clear,
nor the call of the birds so pure,
as the shining joy of the springtime
in the love that did not endure.
Spring’s flowers are always brilliant,
the birds in full throated song,
and the thrusting buds of the springtime
are everywhere, bright and strong.
The birdsong’s a passing pleasure
and he smiles at the lambs at play,
but he says to himself,
life can never
exceed what it was that day.
He chews on the taste of memory
where, always,
Never forgets
that the bittersweet joy of springtime
wants this year, and next, and next.
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nostalgic Written by uche (44 comments posted) 23rd July 2007 |
Hey Fell, i can taste the nostalgia in each line: poignant; good work!! |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3351 comments posted) 23rd July 2007 |
It's so nice to read a poem I can not only understand but also relate to. Spring does have a bittersweet quality, life afirming and yet transitory almost mocking your enjoyment of the season. I feel I know what you mean and I envy your facility to express it. The exercise should keep the literary arthritis at bay, at least Jane |
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 23rd July 2007 |
But they run out in the end and we probably can't recreate them either. More bitter than sweet for me. Nostalgia, yes, but echoes of lost abd irreplacable experiences. Enjoyed. Phil. |
I can almost Written by Seagull (174 comments posted) 23rd July 2007 |
smell the grass and recall the youthful tumbles therein. Evocotive. Chris |
Written by Seagull (174 comments posted) 23rd July 2007 |
| Evocative even!! |
Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 24th July 2007 |
| Very nice, and with such a clear rythm and a good rhime. The simple things are the most beautiful, aren't they? |
Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 24th July 2007 |
| I really like the rhythm of this, it suits the bittersweet subject matter well. It's a very pleasant read; somehow you've managed to create something original and beautiful without using any strikingly original phrases. I hope you see that as the compliment it is intended to be! |
Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 24th July 2007 |
thanks all - specially GK! Funnily enough the poem was meant to turn out the other way around - that we look at spring every year and it's always the most beautiful it has ever been. I had the last line and a half "and every year forgets that it was so last year, and will be next" But it refused to go down that road without being mawkish! |
thrown... Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 24th July 2007 |
...by the word *might* in the first stanza . That set me off on what was probably the completely wrong tack. And the possible double meaning of *want* , both as *desiring* and/or *lacking* addded to my confusion. But I think I have got my muzzy head round it now . This is a very clever poem -- both in structure and expression -- much more than an expression of nostalgia . I note that nobody commented on the title . patterjack |
Caleb Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 25th July 2007 |
| is Latin caelebs, or coelebs, meaning "a bachelor". Well spotted Brian ... |
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