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Fire Watching
By gedbackland
25 July 2007

Missing The Days

I miss us

In your mum’s house

Fire watching

Messing

Watched over by the blown glass fish

and macrame owl

If it seems a million years ago

It was

Yet it only takes a brown wooden bead

To evoke a small hoot of a smile


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Written by Phil (6675 comments posted) 24th July 2007
I like this. Nostalgia without being overly sentimental. Actually, quite touching - oddly then, I'd leave the last line. 
 
Phil

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 25th July 2007
Agree with Phil 100%. Nice little piece but doesn't need the last line.

Written by fellpony (1597 comments posted) 26th July 2007
I wondered if it was the kind of fire watching my Dad used to do, on duty on the roof of his Liverpool office during the nights of the WW2 Blitz ... however it's clearly not. Agree with the others, the last line is slightly out of focus with the rest, but a nice snapshot nonetheless.

Written by gedbackland (24 comments posted) 29th July 2007
Hi fellpony 
it's not fire watching but gas fire watching in a house on Thornton Road Bootle, Liverpool, - last line removed by popular consent

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