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Poetry
The Truth
By PeterThomas
23 March 2005
In everyone - in the deep of their heart - is a part of themselves so dark, so horribly black that they are afraid to let it show.

They are not bad people. Their souls are not evil.

But they do not know the truth.

Written after a painful breakup, this is what I saw in me and around me.

All around me, this black city churns;

It's vile breath hot against my shadowed body.

And as I walk against the crowd of faceless people

(as I always have)

I realize I am an anonymous name in a crowd

of shameless Lovers.

 

They think they know.

They think they have learned the secrets.

They think they have found the truth.

 

But on my walk I have seen many things,

And today I saw

(many times)

That they are mistaken,

And they have built their lives on

Things of emptiness and lust.

 

I have seen that kisses are not contracts.

 

That promises can be broken.

 

And that eternities are not always forever.

 

There is time enough to love yourself,

After you have given up on the love of others.

But you cannot keep the world out.

It is always there.

Like a dirty needle

                                              hanging

                                                                      in

                                                                                     your

                                                                                                          vein.

 

 

That is what I have seen.

And that is the truth of love.

 

Because - most importantly - for every happy ending, there was a beginning.

 

And this is that was ours...

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Written by Flippy_D (14 comments posted) 24th March 2005
Yes. Good. The formatting on the vein arguably unecessary, but it does draw attention to the line, and a good one it is, too. Good stuff, though I prefer more abstract takes on abstract topics - this is slightly too literal for my personal taste in parts. 
 
However, good. Worth commenting on, anyway.
The Truth
Written by goingtothedogs (58 comments posted) 22nd May 2007
Interesting contrast between your peice and mine of the same name....

Written by stevetroster (1588 comments posted) 22nd May 2007
I like the 'hanging in your vein' format, and a good piece all round in my opinion. 
 
I once wrote a piece called 'Lost for words', 
where the dialogue/narrative decreased 
in length with each line so that by 
the time that you got to the 
bottom of the page the  
lines just petered 
out, hence, 
lost for 
words. 
 
I like weird stuff, but the fact that I am in the minority is probably why my book never got published! 
 
Best wishes 
steve.i

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