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Model (some nudity)
By Seagull
25 July 2007
Fashion model came from Bolton;
went to Paris saw the sights.
She scaled the heights.
Close cropped hair with slit down skirt;
with tits on show, oh what a flirt,
beneath the lens and harsh white glare.
Then left on stalls in pouring rain;
oh what bollocks, such a shame!


Peasant girl from slums of Paris;
went to Bolton became a bride.
At least she'd tried.
Streaked blonde hair and dress of white;
not for her Dior's delight.
Outside the Church she's catching stares.
Then fifteen kids and fag in mouth
she shuffles round the house, who cares?

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Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 25th July 2007
Is it just to contrast the two or are they actually the same person and did her career not work out as planned? Well, at least I guess Bolton (or any other place in Britain) can't be worse than the slums of Paris. 
Good read.

Written by Seagull (174 comments posted) 25th July 2007
It's the same girl.

Written by Phil (6635 comments posted) 26th July 2007
Crikey, what a come down. Bolton! I'm here on missionary work for the YLO - but to choose to settle here! Still: fifteen kids and fag in mouth - she's not alone around here. 
 
Perhaps I shouldn't mock - this sounds like it might be based on fact. 
 
Shattered dreams, I guess. Almost like a cautionary tale not to reach too high - and yet where would we all be then? 
 
I liked this. Something about line three that doesn't quite work for me. Structured the same as the second verse, but it kind of jags. 
 
Phil

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