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By Josie
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26 July 2007 |
The poem speaks for itself.
SENTENCED
Is he who lacks vision, drive and ambition -
But prefers the imprisonment of tradition.
INCARCErated
By bonds of monotonous life-draining labour
Yet unwilling to grasp life's new opportunities.
KILLED
By lack of passion, uninspired thinking, apathy -
Unfulfilled dreams, melancholia, self destruction.
ENTOMBED FOREVER
Within the graveyard of the inward facing mind,
The constant complaining, yet unwillingness to change.
Copyright 2007
www.whiteheadm.co.uk
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Not as cheerful
Written by Seagull (174 comments posted) 26th July 2007 | as the ski-ing one but very true.
Seagull | Not as Cheerful
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 27th July 2007 | Thank you Seagull - I see you've been driven inland by the storms! Thanks for your review.
Write: "Dies Slowly" by Pablo Neruda on Google. As you may know, he is one of the world's best poets (tell me if I', wrong) and this is a translation. Read it several times and let his advice be absorbed. You may, as I have, after churning the words in the washing machine of the brain compartment, come out with something similar. Not cheerful, no - but can lead to a change of lifestyle, ha ha. He gives many warnings about how we should change ourselves. Those who read my poems will definitely see a change to my usual poetry - such as "Such Fun on the Downhill Slope" - but how can you have this fun if you are not prepared to change? Now to change my hobby from poetry to - - - - - Now what hobbies begin with A on the A to Z scale? Let's start at the very beginning: Ah - athletics or, perhaps, art. So before I'm too old, I'm off for a change. |
Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 27th July 2007 | | That's... a clear warning. No-one lacks dreams, but most people lack the courage to make them true. There is this story of fish who swam up a river and tried to jump over a waterfall. Those which succeeded turned into dragons, yet those that failed had to wear a red stain on their heads as a sign of their failure. I think most people choose to live as fish rather than dragons, because of the risk of having to come back that way. |
Written by Phil (6388 comments posted) 27th July 2007 | And fish don't get bad breath.
Interesting piece Josie - and very different to your usual style. Is this your translation?
Phil. | Hello
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 27th July 2007 | Fledermaus: Actually it really does make you think, yes! Suddenly you find your days going by fast and it is sad if you suddenly think that you could have filled them with things more interesting but were afraid to change from the old and reliable. (Isn't this when women suddenly change to wearing purple and doing absurd things?) Should we wear purple if we are prepared to change, and the red mark on our coats if we are not and end up dead boring?
Phil: Yes, this is completely different to my usual style. You really should see the translation. Mine is definitely not the translation in any way, yet I picked up food for thought from it. Whereas he spelled out many things, I have left the concepts open to interpretation because, although it is not a children's poem, teenagers who say "I hate the school holidays/after school time etc because the time is boring" could learn from this poem that you can change yourself before you become entombed. There is no age when this should happen. I could have written this for someone I know really well who has gone through every stage of my poem and now is completely entombed. I listen to the list of complaints and problems and sometimes say: "So, what are you going to do to change your situation?" and there comes a long long long pause because of the entombment. Here is the translation:
http://eleternoretorno.blogspot.com/2005/06/pablo-neruda-die-slowly.html |
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