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The Singing Bones
By TurboWolffe
26 July 2007
Something I picked up from the story of the Minotaur in Greek mythology.

A hag bent with age
And worn with change
Hobbling with a sack
Across her bowed back
She climbed a small hill
And came under a tree
And hung bones while the wind was still
She chanted her rhyme
Then the wind blew in time
The bones began to sing
They sang of each thing
That awaits down the road
Things bad and things good
Then the wind died down
And the old hag began to frown
The bones were still
Atop the small hill
Hanging from a tree
A hangman's tree
The hag thought a moment
Then cackled with glee
For the song was decoded
And what the bones did cree
Would always be
For she was never wrong
But always right
And the old hag hobbled home
Filled with delight

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Written by Phil (6688 comments posted) 27th July 2007
Interesting piece TW. The beginning of an oracle? 
 
One or two forced rhymes. eg/ 
 
Then the wind died down 
And the old hag began to frown 
 
That jarred. 
 
Phil

Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 1st August 2007
I think that buried within this there is a very good poem waiting to be born More time spent on this would yield results. As it reads now it seems like a first draft - ideas in waiting. Lengthening lines and including some bolder imagery would enhance this imo. 
Think about extending this Turbo and you'll have a much better poem. 
 
hm

Written by Josie (2780 comments posted) 15th September 2007
You have the story, but not the poem. After the constructive criticism above, why didn't you work on this poem to improve it? Or have you given up on this one?

Written by TurboWolffe (98 comments posted) 29th December 2007
i forget my old work, josie, so don't be discouraged! i now see that a few lines jarred since my intellect has increased and i'm now officialy...14! i'm suprised when i think back to when i joined; i've grown so much since. please, keep an eye out for The Fallen, i know you'll love it, steve! 
-TW

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