cursery rymne

[peter]

of .. coarse language , can course friction ..
When used as , a provocative , description ..
Yet looks can kill , with a terrorfying violence ..
Provoking , an argument , that`s turned into violence ..

Hence , skilful use of words ..
Maybe useful if , a situation , occurs ..
With a good , sense of humour and level headed , choice ..
Please . don`t cut off my bollocks , or i`ll have a squeaky voice ..

[Sooz]

Another one of your better ones. Personally, I didn't like the use of violence on two consecutive line ending.

I would make Yet looks can kill , with a terrorfying violence ...Voice?

But then you use voice again later on.

Overall though I liked this one. Partially because I can understand it, but also because of the humour in it.

[peter]

Hello . it was just a response to the comments on swearing .bad language is usually unrehearsed and when used in writing the author can reread , edit . I just write off the top of my head , nothing is planned that why i`m probably misunderstood ,i`d be writing something else five minutes later . I've wrote and made books like this in one go . I think this freaks people out but i`m not trying to win prizes . your comments are like having a conversation on equal terms because in away we both understand each other but just express individuality , hence mutual respect .

[peter]

Hello . I made a mistake with the line . it should have read `looks can kill , with a terrorfying silence . well spotted , that was the gist of the story and I effing ******d it up .

[dragon]

Please . don`t cut off my bollocks , or i`ll have a squeaky voice ..

Pity jobs for castrati are thin on the ground these days.......one could recommend it as a career choice for those who have graduated from this site!

[dragon]

...oops, forgot to say, nice one, peter!