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All Our Yesterdays Today (All Our Todays Tomorrow)

Postby Messiah » Fri Jul 29, 2011 4:01 pm

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It is Sunday. Bells are ringing all over the city. Large bells. Small bells. Medium-sized bells. Hand bells. It is impossible to hear anything above their incessant clamour. With your hands bound tightly behind your back and your naked body covered in blue and purple welts of varying size, shape and hue, you stand at the crossway of two dimly lit alleys. Several of your fingers are broken. With the tip of your tongue you explore the cavity where your two front teeth used to be. Once again you taste blood.
Stood beneath the glare of a perigeal moon, a listing telegraph pole casts the shadow of the cross onto damp, moss-encrusted cobbles. Beside it, tall and erect, stands a telecommunication mast from which are hung the battered and bloodied bodies of a sixty-two-year-old man and his thirty-four-year old mistress——a woman who had suffered with primary amenorrhea and chronic renal failure. The bodies hang upside-down on meat-hooks. Beneath them, a patient vulture stalks an emaciated Sudanese child.
From the alleyway to your rear comes the sound of screaming and the smell of burning flesh. You are unable to ascertain if these are the screams of men, women or children. Impulsively your mind drags up a memory of excited children chasing squealing pigs at a summer barbecue attended only by uninvited guests——this, in turn, drags up the scene of power drunk Serbians enjoying a ''Live Pire'' in Srebrenica.
General Nguyen Ngoc Loan holds a loaded revolver to your temple. His face displays a complete lack of emotion and his body language is apathetic. You recall the image of Thich Quang Duc self-immolating on a busy Saigon street.

It is Sunday. You are sitting at a table, reading about King Æthelstan, and all across the city bells are ringing. Suddenly there is a huge explosion and you are knocked off your feet. As an enemy aeroplane flies overhead, its machine guns chattering, two men come crashing breathlessly down the stairs carrying carcasses of beef.
A waiter brings you a glass of sacramental wine and sets down a small silver salver containing a piece of unleavened bread. You tip in a niggardly fashion and turn your attention to the busy high street. A motorcade rolls by, resplendent in mile after mile of shiny coachwork. The floral tributes read: ''MUM'', ''DAD'' and ''PEACE''. Among others, you recognise Vazgen Sargsyan, Ahmed Maher Pasha and Anwar Sadat, Spencer Perceval, Muhammad Mansur Ali, Indira and Rajiv Gandhi, Yitzhak Rabin, Hazza al-Majali, Luis Carrero Blanco, Hasan-ali Mansur, Mohammad Ali Rajai and Mohammad-Javad Bahonar, René Moawad, Sidónio Bernardino Cardoso da Silva Pais, Liaquat Ali Khan and Benazir Bhutto, Archduke Franz Ferdinand, Zoran Đinđić, John F. Kennedy. The procession lasts for several hours.
You purchase a broadsheet from a passing news vendor, only to discover that it is a misprint. The broadsheet contains no date; however, the headline seems strangely familiar. You experience a feeling of deja vu. The artillery fire on the front positions reaches crescendo. Alone, you man the trench, shooting forwards. The candles have all blown out and it is impossible to hear anything above the noise of Howitzers thundering their shells into the night, but it now seems much quieter than in the past few weeks.
In the alleyway before you stand four hooded youths, each of them armed with a weapon you instantly recognise as a Colonial Marine incinerator. The image is surreal; and yet the seductive aroma of gasoline is undeniable. A young child comes running towards you. She has torn off her clothes and is screaming, “Nong qua! Nong qua!” When you see that she is burned, you drop your camera beside the road and run to help her. Hanging from her back are strips of fire-blackened flesh that you at first mistake for the remnants of her umber coloured ao dai.
You turn your eyes and look to the alleyway on your left. A young woman is lying in the gutter, her left hand pressed to a stomach wound that bleeds profusely. She raises her tremulous right arm and points towards a darkened doorway, her eyes filled with terror. You hear a guttural growl and catch a glimpse of two dispassionate, unholy eyes. Moonlight flashes on a cold steel blade of perverse proportions and your olfactory system is assailed by the stench of an abattoir.

It is Sunday. The alarm bells are ringing out all across the city. You run from the cafeteria and stare up. It is then that you see them——hundreds upon hundreds of torpedo bombers swarm in the early morning sky. You run towards the ships, planes zooming overhead and explosions ringing out across the harbour. The smell of smoke and gunpowder fills the air. As you turn the corner the dock explodes into oblivion.
You turn your head to the right and stare into the depths of the last of your prospective routes. The pitiful lowing of the cows as they stumble through a pool of fluorosulfuric acid is pathetic. Drawn to the stumps of these floundering beasts' once-legs, your eyes dilate involuntarily. You catch the scent of a furnace and hear the sound of a round being chambered.
“All done?”
You hear the hammer fall.
“Going once!”
Exploding propellent roars in your right ear.
“Going Twice!”
You feel your ear's timpanic membrane shatter like glass.
“Going, going, g—”
Time stops. All the lights go out. Slowly the roar fades, turns into a whisper, the whisper into an eerie voice that echoes down the alleyways of your subconscious mind: “I've seen things you people wouldn't believe.”

It is Sunday. With your hands bound behind your back, and your naked body covered in blue and purple welts, you stand at the crossway of two dimly lit alleys. Standing beside you to your right, General Nguyen Ngoc Loan cocks his pistol.
'Choose wisely,' he murmurs, in pidgin English.


It is Sunday.
Bells are ringing all over the city.



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Last edited by Messiah on Wed Aug 08, 2012 8:16 am, edited 11 times in total.
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Re: All Your Yesterdays Today

Postby Sue » Fri Jul 29, 2011 9:09 pm

Hi Steve

You write well and your style is very distinctive. The idea of the three different deaths - or apocalypses - to be chosen, is horrible and real. I can't say I enjoyed it though. That is a personal preference.

One question - the squealing pigs at the barbecue - invited guests, incidental music, or being slaughtered for the feast? If the last, the interval between the two is probably quite a lengthy one. Just wondering.
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Re: All Your Yesterdays Today

Postby Messiah » Sat Jul 30, 2011 10:39 am

Thank you, Sue.

I can understand that the image of pigs squealing at a barbecue might be confusing, so I have changed it slightly. The scene might indeed be a harmless scene of children chasing pigs while their parents burn pork sausages, or it might be Serbians enjoying a ''Live Pire'' in Srebrenica.
As much of what goes on in the story are surreal images conjured up in the moments before ''You'' are forced to choose which direction you will follow, all of them should be read subjectively.
As for myself: I recall, as a child, watching the TV report on Trang Bang, and my history teacher showing my class a film which included footage of a Japanese soldier staggering from a pill box following an American assault using a flamethrower (and the laughter of one of my classmates!), as well as a suspected informer (this in some African conflict) floundering around on all fours while a member of the army hit him continually about the top of the head with a hammer (though equally fatal, a bullet to the head – a la General Nguyen Ngoc Loan – would have been kinder).
These images, among others, have stayed with me throughout my life (perhaps I should sue the department of education?) and, sadly, similar images pop up on a fairly regular basis to bolster their number.

This piece is about a man (or mankind) standing at a crossroad to the future. All of the possible routes are quite unsavoury, as are the routes that have led there.

I must away now to take my tablets.

All the best,
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Re: All Your Yesterdays Today

Postby Messiah » Sat Jul 30, 2011 5:34 pm

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To-morrow, and to-morrow, and to-morrow,
Creeps in this petty pace from day to day
To the last syllable of recorded time,
And all our yesterdays have lighted fools
The way to dusty death. Out, out, brief candle!

- William Shakespeare
Macbeth: Act 5, Scene 5 (excerpt).


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Re: All Your Yesterdays Today

Postby Messiah » Wed Aug 03, 2011 3:20 pm

If today was not an endless highway
If tonight was not a crooked trail
If tomorrow wasn’t such a long time...
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Re: All Your Yesterdays Today

Postby Messiah » Sat Aug 06, 2011 10:34 am

Come along
Sing a song, when today becomes tomorrow
Whether fine, joy or sorrow, sing a song.
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Re: All Your Yesterdays Today

Postby coffee@cream » Sun Aug 07, 2011 8:47 pm

I love this style of writing brutal, dark and at times heart stopping!

I loved your beginning, w and the reader is placed right in the thick of it.
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Re: All Your Yesterdays Today

Postby Nick » Mon Aug 08, 2011 1:08 pm

A very dark and disturbing piece Steve. Won't say I enjoyed it but it made me think.

It also reminded me of a picture I saw as a kid of a German soldier who'd had his face blown off but had lived for a few days - he was literally a man without a face - it freaked me out and is something i will never forget.

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Re: All Your Yesterdays Today

Postby Messiah » Wed Aug 10, 2011 10:54 am

Dear coffee@cream.
Thank you for your comment.
These days, I only know the one way of writing - so it's good that it worked for you.
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Re: All Your Yesterdays Today

Postby Messiah » Fri Aug 12, 2011 2:29 pm

Thank you, Nick.
It fills me with joy to know that you are always there for me.

Godly love is winging its way in your direction,
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