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Postby Lordspudz » Wed Apr 04, 2012 4:11 pm

Included this in a novel I'm trying to write (trying being the operative word) ;) It's part of the thoughts of someone whose lost his wife.

Any feedback would be gratefully received



Can I sleepwalk back to a time where waking was paradise found?
Can I play in the land of haunted memories where time is a wounded soul?
Can I run through fields of emblazoned corn and weep where once was joy?
Can I smile at your face with hope where once reigned abject pessimism?
Can I walk these streets of cosy familiarity, retracing steps where love strode carefree?
Can I dance to the beat of long forgotten rhymes in halls of acoustic muteness?
Can I dare do these things in stark solitude where once was union?
Can I live without you?

Can I?
Of all the words available, which is the right one?
Lordspudz
 
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