I think this could be a really fun tale and it's obvious that you've put a lot into it, but I found it quite difficult to read. The main reason was the sheer density of references and names made it hard for me to follow. This piece introduces or mentions in passing twenty four characters/names - some of whom also have nicknames or aliases. The previous episode had a similar count, with 12 names but half the length- that's an average of 4 new names every 500 words if you're interested in the stats
Generally when I've read (or more often seen, as it's quite a cinematic type of tale) an ensemble piece such as this, the author will normally introduce the characters a bit gradually to allow the reader to absorb before piling on new names. So Kate Shelley might get a chapter on her own before being thrown in with the rest, and so might Jonah Hex and Mr Jones, etc. At the moment it seems overwhelming and can also seem like the references are just being piled on in lieu of actual storytelling - I'm sure that's not the case, but for me that's the impression it gives.
My second gripe is much more minor, but easy to fix - and that's the formatting. The combination of indented first lines and no spaces between paragraphs gives a ragged homogenity to the text that I find really hard to read.
SO, I think you've got some great ideas here but perhaps go a little more easy on the reader and give them time to get up to speed and know who everyone is.