The Union of Extraordinary Americans

[Messiah]

I have already mentioned in a comment (somewhere) that I am not entirely happy going straight in with the scene of the meeting and may very well write an opening chapter or two at some future point. However, at present these are mere doodles designed to allow me, the author, to get to know my lead characters and to give him/her a voice. Therefore, at present there are no plans to rewrite until I am much further into the story - and have decided where it is all going, if anywhere.

I do accept that the story is being read on screen, but can see no reason why reading a story in this way is any different to reading it on paper (save for the angle of approach) so will not be changing the layout. E-books be damned!

As for your comment: “The previous episode had a similar count, with 12 names but half the length…”
There were only seven characters introduced in the first chapter, some only by reference to their name and the fact that they were present in the room. So there really shouldn’t be that much to absorb. Of course, if you count the people referenced in the description of the paintings then this adds a further three. However, describing the contents of a painting, in my opinion, does not constitute adding another character.
I am yet to come across a story that informs the reader that “A” enters a room and studies a painting, and then, in the following chapter, reveals to his readership: Oh, by the way, the painting was the Mona Lisa.

[Jimbo]

Messiah

I'm thoroughly enjoying this story. I'm a sucker for tales of heroes and heroines ... er ... pard!
I'm also a fan of a good Western movie. (Yee-hah! - and so on and so forth.)
Not such a big fan of fashion but the others seem to have discussed that quite enough ... um ... you 'ornery critter.
Anyway, I look forward to reading more and I'm having no problem reading it on the screen ... er ... ya lily livered, bow legged varmint.
Thanks for the treat ... ah ... bless your beautiful hide.

Jim

[Messiah]

Thanks, Jimbo. Pleased your having no trouble reading m' yarn. Hope you'll hang around f' chapter four - you may recognise someone?! But before that I have to get chapter 3 finished.
So long f' now, pard.
Jay C. James.

[Messiah]

Whilst I continue to play around with this whenever I get a spare moment (whilst continuing to juggle Palingale, MGM, et al) I remain undecided as to whether I should stick with the original Alan Mooresque ''Union of Extraordinary Americans'' (UEA) or the latter (as currently posted) ''Company of Incredible Americans'' (CIA).
Any thoughts?

[Ben Allen]

UEA seems o.k to me, sounds better than 'incredible Americans,' although the CIA pun is nice. Purely personal preference, nothing to do with anything else.

Hadn't seen this before, Steve.
Read through to Chapter 6 so far.
Enjoying it.

Ben

[Messiah]

Six chapters without dozing off?! The boy done good!
I am sorely tempted to go with UEA, seeing as how it was the original name, but...

Whip crack away, pard,
Wild Bill Whooping-Cough.