My piece was just that- a descriptive piece. There wasn't meant to be a plot or action. Many have come away feeling that my writing was of some value, so I suggest you pull your shitty piece of writing out of your arse and learn what good writing actually is.
I suggest that before you critique my work, you learn to write a decent piece of your own, as you clearly have no idea what you are talking about.
It's bitter and arrogant people like you that spoil this site.
Oh, and this piece right here is absolute 3rd class tripe. Someone wake me up if I fall asleep reading it. I suggest you revise the adjectives you use as you ridiculous undersell this already very poor piece. 'Shiny' 'lovely.'
Jesus, my five year old cousin could write better than that.