WendyPratt wrote:the doves
became a mass of bloody feathers up his sleeve.
He doesn't know that I’ve purchased
a secret trap door of my own.
One day I’ll be all sequined giggles
folding fish net legs into a sparkly box
and when he lifts the lid
The doves becoming "bloody feathers" - while startling - seemed at odds with the act - I mean, it would work out expensive, not to mention messy.
Love the idea of buying a secret trap door. "Would yer like ter buy this 'ole, it's secret, can yer see it? no? well, that just shows yer, dunnit." I think it's the word "purchased." Arranged, maybe?
I like the missing line from the end, "he'll find me gone" or something of that sort. One way you could make it more obvious (if you wanted) would be to make those last three lines 3/4 of a quatrain that's going to rhyme ABAB, then just don't put in the last B line. Tacky idea, but then the act is clearly tacky too
Or maybe add the word "again" after "lid".