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Postby Messiah » Fri Nov 04, 2011 3:32 pm

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Re: The Union of Extraordinary Americans (IV)

Postby Rages » Sat Nov 05, 2011 11:16 am

Steve

I recently read an article penned by an expert. He said that the only acceptable speech identifier is "said". All other forms are distracting. However, I risked falling off the sofa through loss of concentration (at least four times), and notwithstanding the sage advice of experts, soldiered on through this instalment of your Weird West tale, and was impressed.
To me it brings to mind the sepia action shots sometimes shown in the title sequences of old westerns. i.e. it’s atmospheric.
I do lose track of the various characters now and then, but that's not such a problem for me as I like to go with the flow when I read (I'll rarely flick back). Catherine Shelley centres it.
Not much more I can add to that - maybe it's an acquired taste - like a thick cup of Arbuckle's you can stand your spoon up in this one.

Cheers

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Re: The Union of Extraordinary Americans (IV)

Postby Messiah » Sat Nov 05, 2011 4:25 pm

'H'm,'' said Steve, 'I ain't no pro but, for me, there's a difference between someone whispering and murmuring. And a mutter sounds quite a bit different to a holler.'

It strikes me that the English dictionary ever expands, while the (acceptable) literary dictionary shrinks daily. Don't use this. Don't use THAT.
Isn't ''that'' how NewSpeak begins, with people throwing away vast chunks of the English language which they believe has no further use. That's double-plus-ungood from where I'm standin', pard.
Regardless, I'm mighty pleased y' still enjoyin' m' yarn, pard.
Must admit that I'm enjoyin' the writin' of it. Makes a pleasant chance from m' killin' off of all those religious varmints!

See y' aroun', pard.
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Re: The Union of Extraordinary Americans (IV)

Postby Rages » Sat Nov 05, 2011 5:57 pm

The judicious use of a murmur or two is just fine by yours truly - y' know my expert was really just an "expert".. With you all the way on freedom to use all the colours of the dictionary..
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Re: The Union of Extraordinary Americans (IV)

Postby Messiah » Sat Nov 05, 2011 6:31 pm

Long as y' expert ain't no pontificating pronunciation pervert high on peyote tea, it's fine w' me, too, pard.
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